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While finishing the previous draft, I realized I was really pussyfooting around, and it wasn't doing anyone any favours, because the whole thing is one gigantic dog-whistle either way. I wanted to capture that sweet sweet feeling of radicalization into a nervous breakdown. It has to be perfect, or else I am just an edge lord. How did I do? Bretty good DESU. It's light on setting details but it reads like the bible, kind of, and would be bogged down with excessive "Marble columns," etc. No notes.⏱ 13h↩ 1
Protag reads male, it being a woman doesn’t ring true to me. How many women do you know that think this way? Is this an MtF situation? Also I feel like your hearts not in the dog whistling, this is all very generic sentiment. Especially with Jean Raspail being so talked about lately. Which, I guess there’s a reality then where something like that is true but I don’t know. Just seems β€˜easy’ I liked the mouse at the end but it also seems a little on the nose. Might want to pad out the length some and split that off so it’s a little less obvious⏱ 13h↩ 1